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Lord Leo

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Re: Total Miner Dis Track
« Reply #20 on: March 05, 2016, 10:24:38 AM »
oh yeah trub?
Your rap goes the extra mile
 You aint got skill
 Unless you take a pill
 I am not impressed
 ima finish the rest
 you aint got nothin on me
 so why dont you take a rest
« Last Edit: March 05, 2016, 10:26:43 AM by CircleCat113 »

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Re: Total Miner Dis Track
« Reply #21 on: March 05, 2016, 01:31:53 PM »
oh yeah trub?
Your rap goes the extra mile
 You aint got skill
 Unless you take a pill
 I am not impressed
 ima finish the rest
 you aint got nothin on me
 so why dont you take a rest
You rhymed "rest" with "rest".
"Me" and "mile" don't have accompanying words.
Need I tell you that your syllable structure is atrocious. The rythym that someone would need in order to make this sound half decent would have to be changing every line.

Also, since you want to sound like a modern rapper, throw in some techno beeps.

No hard feelings, but I figure that since I've been a little behind the scenes for this topic, I'd step out from the curtains and do a little critique on the return raps we get. I started with you, of course. Only because I don't want to have point out Mysterio's spelling... oops... ;)
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Re: Total Miner Dis Track
« Reply #22 on: March 05, 2016, 02:01:35 PM »
Dis me brah!