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A knighty adventure
« on: February 02, 2016, 04:23:13 PM »
Edit: Please delete this.
« Last Edit: January 18, 2018, 12:04:50 AM by Rollins »
I'm a wrestling fan, and Storywriter in the making.
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Re: A knighty adventure
« Reply #1 on: February 03, 2016, 01:44:47 PM »
uhhhhh


               

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Re: A knighty adventure
« Reply #2 on: February 03, 2016, 01:52:09 PM »
I demand a movie adaptation of this right now!

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Re: A knighty adventure
« Reply #3 on: February 03, 2016, 01:59:03 PM »
Just a suggestion, Try a bit of pacing in your storytelling. In most books I read, The story doesn't escalate that quick in the first chapter.

You may also want to work a bit on your ability to convey your "plot" in a way that keeps the reader interested.

If you're writing a love story, You don't want to skip over the parts that give substance to it, As that is rather unrealistic, And uninteresting.

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Re: A knighty adventure
« Reply #4 on: February 03, 2016, 03:27:34 PM »


EDIT: I had no thought process back then.

« Last Edit: March 16, 2018, 12:01:01 AM by Rollins »
I'm a wrestling fan, and Storywriter in the making.
The Many Miles Story is my second story, and is currently in the works today. You can read it here:
http://totalminerforums.net/index.php?topic=19330.msg198305#new